Finally decided to get around to posting something on here. I wrote this short story for my English Lit class, and I decided that, heck, I might as well spruce it up and post it on here.
Date: 01 Dec 2014 20:32
Number of posts: 4
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I'm lukewarm on this. There are a lot of issues with commas (particularly following "and"'s) and the ending is kind of telegraphed from the first paragraph. However, I was so revved up, expecting the old man to be one of the old folk that the ending was kind of a surprise. The last few lines were actually pretty good, though. I would've liked to have seen more of the old folk than "dude gets chased by wolves," though, and I can't give this anything more than a no-vote as it currently stands.
I feel similarly, but the bits that made gaffs luke-warm made me decide to upvote.
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I've written a tale upvoted by Djoric, Bright, Echo, Yoric, Moose, VAE and Voct, fite me irl if you don't respect