I wish I had half the patience of you to have so much build up and a great end.
Date: 20 May 2015 15:52
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Tagged, but haven't added it to a Book, not knowing where you'd prefer this.
Really excellently done. I like how you solved the issues the piece had before — that clearly wasn't easy.
I made some style tweaks and fixed some errors. There are a few issues left, but they're minor (POV switching, incorrect speaker/paragraph grouping, awkward structures).