I have a Poem draft

Summary:

ok so here is the link to my poems draft can i post this poem

I have a Poem draft

TheRyter 11 Dec 2019 22:10

http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/of-the-private-library-of-theryter
The Poems tilte is
The First Poem of Program.Wanderer
it is at the bottem of the page

Re: I have a Poem draft

Avelon21 12 Dec 2019 10:32

I notice by reading through this poem that the rhythm is very irregular, and the rhyme scheme is hard-to-follow and enjoy. I think those two issues need to be addressed first before content can be fixed. The concept is interesting, but it should flow better first for better effect.

Please refer to my poetry guide if you haven't already (here), and feel free to ask me about what you can do to specific sections to make it better. First, however, try to go through it and fix anything you can.