I've begun working on a new story by the name of Excerpts from the War of Leaves, focusing on main excerpts and folk tales to explain a series of conflicts call the War of Leaves. I've written a small amount so far and intend to add on, but was wondering if anyone could give me any advice. The story can be found under the second tab of this page: http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/tesrec-s-corner
I like the idea of the story being composed of excerpts, although its effectiveness as a single story might change depending on how many of said excerpts you plan on including.
I've included a couple of sections below with remarks about a couple of the excerpts. I left out the two at the bottom, as I assume those are unfinished.
Thank you so much for the advice! I do plan on adding onto the excerpts at the bottom as well as adding others, and will definitely take your advice regarding grammar and story structure.