Rock of Antiquity / Discussion

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Avelon21 06 May 2020 13:36

I feel like you could improve a lot with language use. Some of the words are repetitive, and using variation would help establish a better mood for the story, especially at the start. I also seem some grammar stuff, make sure to read your work before posting to look for mistakes.

I like the story and the overall concept, but I feel like it wasn't executed as well as it could've been. Upvoting because I think this could be strong, but I seriously would like to see some improvement on this story soon (remember that you can always revise and edit a story you've posted if you feel that you need to fix stuff).

karlson de clare 07 May 2020 06:13

Hey thanks for the advice! I made some changes to it. I hope that helped the wording and structure. I also changed some minor details to help it flow better.

rumetzen 07 May 2020 17:06

There's still some SPaG errors ("The arch still stood proud", "hero's long dead") but over all this is simple and interesting. I like the concept, and feel it does a good job of capturing the old Library writing feel.