I am not a designated reviewer, nor an accomplished author, but I hope my critique is still helpful, as unqualified as it may be.
I don't know if you are aware, but in poetry commas at the end of verses aren't always necessary, which is to say, they are only necessary when the sentence calls for it, or when you want the break at the end of the verse to be pronounced even though the sentence makes this hard. The three places where this sticks out the most are: "Creatures with mouths over throats,// Seek insight into their existence,"; "windows reflecting,a goal unachievable,";"while they rested, Their asses in the dirt." In these cases the comma at the end of the verse kind of removes a natural enjambment between those verses. Ordinarily the syntax of those sentences wouldn't fit into the verse structure, which leads the person preforming the poem to skip the break at the end of the verse. It's a thing that has been used by various poets quite intentionally. I have never ever seen an enjambment killed like that, and I am incredibly uncertain about weather or not it is on purpose. It certainly did something somewhat uncanny to me while reading it(the last example specifically was quite humorous actually. I'm not sure why.), and that may be just what you had in mind for that. Again, I am not sure if it was intentional.
You don't seem to follow a meter(unless I've gone blind),which I assume is intentional. As a result the whole thing is kind of awkward to read. It feels like speaking normally with weird pauses in places they shouldn't be. This kind of uncanny feeling might be just what you are looking for, in which case you did well, but in case it isn't, I would recommend maybe looking into meters and stuff, to see if you may want to use one. In general the purpose of a meter is to make a poem more melodic, aka making it smother and nicer to read out loud. If that awkward uncanny feeling is what your going for you may not want to use one, but if it's not it may be a good idea.
Other than that, the line "but not doing, never going," may need a little more setup, which is to say, I'd have expected "bot not doing, never doing," because the idea that it is place they want to go isn't really established at this point. Now that I look I see some lines that kind of hint to it. but it's not obvious. In fact, were it not for that "never going" line, I wouldn't have guessed a theme like that, and I'm still not certain that it's actually there.
If you were already well aware of everything I just said then I'm sorry, it's hard to evaluate that kind of stuff sometimes. Ultimately I'm not certain of any specific change, you have to know what you want out of it and if that is what you have here. I hope I haven't been entirely useless to you, have fun polishing the poem.