Hello! I was wondering if anyone had any last minute ideas or advice for my current prompt entry, which can be found under the tab "Current Prompt Work" here: http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/tesrec-s-corner . If so, I very much appreciate it!
I'm about to go to sleep, but I'll get to it when I wake up.
The first paragraph should be broken up to make it easier to read. Also, it conveys about three different ideas, so yeah, break it up.
Going to go with the same advice I gave last time: expand this. It's an okay start, but it's basically just "we're underground now and don't want to be." Given that this is basically the a hyper-summarized/less-interesting version of the plot to Undertale, there needs to be something more here. There are plenty of directions that you can go with this.
I'd be more interested to learn what happens when they get back to their city. It sounds like they've evolved to be far more suited to underground life. Could they even live in the sunlight world above? Was it everything they'd hoped, or was the tale exaggerated down through the years?