Hello! I wrote a new piece of free-verse and was wondering if it seemed site ready or still in need of work or expansion. It can be found on my sandbox here under the tab A Song For The Gods. Any advice ore ideas would be greatly appreciated as well. Thank you for your time!
I get what you're doing with the progression from the gods being kind to sad to angry to gone, but somehow I'm not feeling the sheer tragic/depressing scale that this implies. It's probably either due to the shortness of the poem, or the simple language. I'm not sure what else I can say about this, since there's nothing technically wrong with it, but neither is there much else of interest to point out. And uninteresting poetry… kind of defeats the point of poetry, I guess.