I can't upvote this one as is. But it's got potential. There are just a few things I'd change.
First off, "vital fluid" just seems like a bit of an awkward phrasing for folklore. Try to find a better way of phrasing it. Second, the flow of the story makes it a little hard to figure out which brother died. It's Foresight, yes, but you could make that a bit more clear.
I'm unsure on the name "Industry." Just doesn't sit right with me. But that's more personal preference. Yoric seems to like the name.