Recovered Inventory of the Cellar in the College of East Yor'el

Summary:

A pretentious title for something I am not entirely confident of.

Reovered Inventory of the Cellar in the College of East Yor'el

Bunton 23 Mar 2012 14:26

Being new to the Library (At time of writing) I thought that I'd best submit this for scrutiny before I post it. Any feedback would be much appreciated, as I'm also lacking for ideas in regards to add.Thank you for your time.

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Re: Reovered Inventory of the Cellar in the College of East Yor'el

Dick Sheldon 28 Mar 2012 20:08

I can see the beggining of a mystery, but it needs more bang to it.

Re: Recovered Inventory of the Cellar in the College of East Yor'el

thedeadlymoose 30 Mar 2012 06:14

I like it well enough. The main issue I have is that the context isn't interesting - I don't have a reason to care about what I'm reading. But I'd still upvote.

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Re: Recovered Inventory of the Cellar in the College of East Yor'el

Bunton 01 Apr 2012 14:33

I'm suprised by how positive your feedback is (insofar, at least), and I suppose I should provide some clarity. I do intend to develop this, as I consider further what items to add - I'd like the list to be rather extensive, and I also plan an expansion of the commentary. In addition, know that this is by no means an independant story, as I plan to expand upon many of the concepts mentioned here, and several other concepts which relate to or support them, in later articles.

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