Make sure to announce your article here, as well as add it to a book so I can tag it appropiately.
Date: 29 Sep 2012 11:23
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I feel like I'm missing something important, because as I'm reading it, it's about a girl with a Western name who goes to return some library books for her Japanese parents. Afterwards, a boat comes and people look at it. It's okay besides a few punctuation errors, but it doesn't evoke a feeling of wonder so much as confusion.
Cool, and I look forward to reading them! However, I'm still down voting based on the fact that in its current form, it does not interest me nor does it seem particularly supernatural.
@Vehemency: Quoth Pair of Ducks, "Stories here should try to evoke a Sense of Wonder, a sense that there is a larger world beyond the one we know." I didn't get that from this story. I was a bit intrigued by the ending, though. However, beyond the mention of the "weird small machine," which could have easily been a mundane device that the narrator didn't recognize (think of how weird an iPad would look to someone who was unfamiliar with the concept), there wasn't any real sense of anything larger happening. I think that this story would do better with at least hints of something uncanny or strange.
Also, in retrospect, downvoting an otherwise-okay article because it didn't click for me and lacked any noticeable supernatural whatnot was probably not the best reason to do so. Downvote removed.
I liked it on the wiki and I like it here. Do get around to writing that sequel sooner than later.
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I downvoted because it's not interesting enough for me, and the writing needs work. (I corrected the dialogue tag errors, but still.)
However, I seem to recall that future installments have some intriguing elements in store, so I'll keep watching for more. This one needs more to it, though.