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Set in a universe in which all water is sapient.
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in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » Clear Skies
I enjoyed it it was interesting.
in discussion Site Announcements and Proposals / Announcements » New Articles 4
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Please delete this reply, I didn't mean to make it.
Sorry for being an idiot.
This is my first article! I hope you like it, but don't be afraid to tell me it's trash.
This article wouldn't be possible without the help of Avelon21 and rumetzen.
Link to their crit of this article here:
http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-12856430/as-the-clouds-above-crash-down-into-the-sea-the-world-as-we
in discussion Forum Discussion / Ideas and Advice » As the clouds above crash down into the sea, the world as we know it crumbles (draft)
Note: I saw your message on discord, and I'm responding here.
- "sending more letters(which would be pointless). Time is ticking, and it won't be long before we will perish." Add a space before the parentheses, remove the "will" in the second sentence.
- "but have to find a way to survive." But we have to find a way to survive.
- I don't think "cure" should be surrounded by quotes. It doesn't really fit the tone of what the Overseers are requesting.
Make sure to make all the "Breaking News" sections bold. Besides that and the stuff above, I like this. You can add more to the end, but I think you have a good first post written out right now !
Final note: No rush for posting or progress, I'm just glad you haven't given up =D
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In a world where the existence of evil twins is universally avowed… how do you know which you are?
in discussion Forum Discussion / Ideas and Advice » As the clouds above crash down into the sea, the world as we know it crumbles (draft)
http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/stop1010
Fixed final news report and adjusted the tone of other news reports to match.
Also, do you think this article would benefit from an image?
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » The land of my fathers
There are a lot of grammar and language errors here, and the formatting is messy in my opinion. There is also very little content here, and I think you should find a better conclusion to end it with. Perhaps you can mention how the three lands are faring now? Think more on what you can expand on in order to show us more of this world.
-1 until you make some revisions. I recommend getting feedback from the forums or the chat before posting. If you would like any help, feel free to reply here or message me through Wikidot.
This…really needs more improvement. There isn't much of a structure here, nor is there a lot of content/detail to enjoy it fully. I recommend reading the poetry guide, which you can find here.
Use the forums or the Discord chat for feedback when you've made improvements, or feel free to PM me for help.
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » The Gatekeeper's Sketchbook
Thank you! I hope to update this page on a fairly regular basis, so there should be more pretty soon!
Crossing the boundaries of uncertainty.
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » The Gatekeeper's Sketchbook
Nice! Big fan of this stuff, looking forward to more.
Good shit, Kirbs.
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » Heart Rot: Chapter 1
First constituent of what will hopefully be a much longer piece.
Much thanks to rumetzen for critiquing.
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » Behemoths
Good catch! I'm glad you enjoyed!
I liked it. Loved how the world of a burrow was built up, character dynamics and all.
Now just to figure out what to go.
This might be a typo.
+1
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » Behemoths
So I'd been meaning to post this for a few weeks, but umm… well 2020 seemed like a good time to do it so I waited until then.
Thanks to Rounder, rumetzen and Uncle Nicolini for critique.
Thanks to rabbits for being small and fluffy.
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » Homicidal Intercourse
This feels a little incomplete, although the narration style was nicely done. Aside from the language errors (and there are quite a few for such a short work), it seems like this is more of an introduction to a character's life, rather than a well-contained plot. In other words, this is more like half of a story rather than a whole one. Consider adding more to the character's life by adding what happens next; in my opinion, you can't just introduce a psychotic character without showing how the psychopath talks to other people. Maybe showing their interaction with their contractor after the job is done would be enough to tie it off nicely.
I am interested to see how you expand with what you have so far.
in discussion Per Page Discussion / Per page discussions » The Journal of the Walk
Damn, I should've done this earlier…Oh well !
I just want to give credit where credit is due: It appears that this Collection was created by DrEverettMann and some other writers from 2010 - 2015. I wrote the hub (although the first two sentences at the start were from the Old Library, and inspired the rest of it), including the friendly writing advice. Thanks to
rumetzen for reviewing this before I posted it.
I know for sure that I'll write something that'll fit into here soon eventually. I encourage everyone else to do the same !
Feel free to PM me for writing review or help adding your story to the hub.
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