this is a beautiful soft piece for a beautiful soft soul. i have not read anything else by this author but i really want to now. thank u for this gift… bless u and ur heart
Hmmm. I'm not sure on what the goal of this is. It feels short, and it doesn't have enough of a narrative for a typical WL story. I recommend expanding a lot more (continue the story of J and what happens next) and rereading for grammar errors.
As far as what's here, there isn't a lot of description, or at least sufficient description to give a good picture of the cavern.
a large cavern with a fighting cage in the center and seating all the way around it.
How do the interior walls of the cavern look? Smooth, blue, red, rough? Describe the cage as well: What material is it made out of? How large is it? The situation of the seating also needs more detail—Is everyone able to sit? Is the cavern packed?
I like the potential this idea has, but I feel like the story you have so far doesn't do it justice. What are your plans for further writing (what would you put in the other chapters/how would you expand chapter one)?
Hello! My name's Avelon, and I hope you have a good time here!
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Howdy! I'm RadiantShark. I'm here to try something new, and to grow in my skills as a writer!
I look forward to getting to know all of you!
Plz give a + or - rating with ur review. It helps me figure things out (just put + or - at the top of review)
Necroposting as all fuck, but I thought it was important to know I almost cried from this one. Thank you
Good good good. I like it
Notes Found Beneath a Hatch
http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/notes-found-beneath-a-hatch
I felt like I couldn't breathe at the end of the story. It's obvious why this one is so highly rated.
today i'll have you around
today i'll have you around
i wrote this poem for a beautiful friend of mine who passed very recently and who taught me a lot about what it means to be a human around other humans. i hope this honors her memory.
special thanks to a soft cacophony for crit!
(if you like my work, visit my author page for other poems, prose, and songs)
It's the hottest new trend. It's the wildest new drug. It's heart-pounding, time-bending, Black Market Magic.
Written for the Serpentine Sorting System.
Reserved
I loved this all the way back during Wanderer's Depths and I still like it now. It was a pleasure reviewing it, and the art is spectacular.
Hell yeah congrats Max!!! Really proud of you for finally getting this posted!! Nice job getting everything cleaned up and the redraw of the art is spectacular as always!
Crossing the boundaries of uncertainty.
This is my first story, I'm honestly a bit nervous posting it but I had a great time writing and creating artwork for this piece. This was originally for a contest, but I ended up not posting until I was absolutely certain I was happy with the end result.
I made the image myself, I release it in Creative Commons.
Thanks to Sebarus and
UncertaintyCrossing for helping to review and encouragement!
Images made by my friend and used with his permission. You can check out his work here: https://jmb3x9z3kvfjutuw.tumblr.com/
Noting that I believe you already got review a few days ago in the chat. I agree with the review given in the chat, that this is a little too short and needs more expansion.
Absolutely fantastic.
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