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Deletions - 2022-01-19

Re: Deletions by Snapdragon133Snapdragon133, 19 Jan 2022 23:48

Probably!

by IronShearsIronShears, 19 Jan 2022 21:56

This is awesome, are you thinking of writing any more from Ignota? I would love to learn more about them.

by GrendelnachtGrendelnacht, 19 Jan 2022 15:44

I wrote something short and sentimental.

Playing Pretend

Re: New Articles 4 by IronShearsIronShears, 18 Jan 2022 22:17

I'm a stark proponent for weird kid representation.

(Also C. Ignota is a they/them. That probably gives away what this is partially a metaphor for lmao.)

The image can be found here: https://www.flickr.com/photos/14913305@N00/16671528787

It us under CC-BY-SA. Edits were made by me.

The deer logo was drawn by me and is released under cc-by-sa 3.0 https://imgur.com/p36pbPn

Childhood Nostalgia. by IronShearsIronShears, 18 Jan 2022 22:11

After careful consideration, I believe you have addressed all of the issues here.
At this point, I can reasonably say I'd give it a +1 if it were on the main page.

Length: I think the current length is absolutely perfect. Doesn't take too much time to read, but you get enough story to leave satisfied.

Characters: Wonderfully done. I can finally tell (though I'm sure it's much less subtle than you originally intended, it is still subtle enough to make the reader feel that it wasn't ham fisted) that the kid is a Changeling. I think the way you describe the relationship between the changeling and the 'mother' is well done.

Ending: Could use a tiny bit of improvement. Something like,

What I did learn is that I’m not as different from them as I thought.

Also, is the 'them' reference the humans, or the creatures in the book? Depending on whom you're referencing, it could be something like "I'm not as different from the things in the book as I thought," or "I'm not as different from Jacob as I thought," Depending on what message you're trying to get out. I think both are equally good, and once that little thing is fixed, in my opinion, this would probably be ready for posting!

Thank you very kindly.


Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.

Re-review by NotAnOligarchNotAnOligarch, 18 Jan 2022 14:55

This is awesome. I feel like the dryness of the prose adds to the piece.
+1

by GrendelnachtGrendelnacht, 17 Jan 2022 02:22

Yeah we decided to make it more general to give people as much breathing room as possible. Essentially, the theme is rebirth, so don’t worry about the extra stuff if you don’t want to

by Snapdragon133Snapdragon133, 15 Jan 2022 14:37

HAHAHAH! I love the way you made the school resolution bit. Take it from someone who did mock congress in highschool, that was spot on! For some strange reason, this article fills me with joy.

I adore the style of the one. The 'emails/letters/other physical stuff' sort of writing style is one of my favorites. Read an entire 800 page book with that kind of formatting once, and it really adds realism to the piece. But wait… Adding realism to something that isn't real, like the Library? What do we call that, I can't seem to remember…

Oh yeah! We call it damn exquisite writing!

Very, very well done.


Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.

by NotAnOligarchNotAnOligarch, 15 Jan 2022 13:40

Am I the only one who the theme seems unclear to? Is it meant to be sorta vague, so that people can play around with it? Ahhh! I'm not used to contests without a clear and defined canon by the staff.


Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.

by NotAnOligarchNotAnOligarch, 15 Jan 2022 13:28

This has been on my reading list for a while, but now I regret not having read it sooner. Your prose is stellar, every sentence feels interesting and purposeful. The descriptions of consciousness and the dual experience were the highlight for me, very interesting stuff.

Looking forward to reading what happens next in their journey through the maze…

by LAN 2DLAN 2D, 15 Jan 2022 12:08

This is an awesome theme!

by ZeroManZeroMan, 15 Jan 2022 02:39
Re: New Articles 4 by FloritaFlorita, 14 Jan 2022 23:08

Can't wait to read the things that will be written!

by GrendelnachtGrendelnacht, 14 Jan 2022 15:00

A fitting theme for the Library's navigational rebirth!

by LAN 2DLAN 2D, 14 Jan 2022 11:32

Super excited for this. May be my first post to the library!

by AvocadoMilkAvocadoMilk, 14 Jan 2022 03:20

Boy but it's annoying to actually add new stuff to the page.

by TrarTrar, 14 Jan 2022 03:13

I am excited for this! This is a good-ass idea and the theme seems like it fits the WL's vibe, both as a fictional thing and as a website!

by GaffseyGaffsey, 14 Jan 2022 02:29

rounderhouse wuz here

rumetzen edit: poopy butts

by RounderhouseRounderhouse, 14 Jan 2022 02:20

This tickles me in all the right ways.

by rumetzenrumetzen, 14 Jan 2022 02:09
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