Re: Contest Draft - Very Science Fantasy

Thu, 29 Aug 2019 01:45:32 +0000

I'll grab this within 24 hours. A bit busy right now, just letting you know that I'm here. I'll edit this post with some suggested edits, please hold =D

EDIT: lol just handled on discord, tyvm for this forum post regardless and for waiting!

Contest Draft - Very Science Fantasy

Wed, 28 Aug 2019 18:53:28 +0000

Here's the draft to make it quick:

http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/cortangia

I took a long time to not write that much. I think this could be more focused on a couple things, and Nilet could be more openly robotic or more character-y. Definitely probably going to add another part to the end to wrap it up, cause I think it's too melancholy now. Also, I want to make Vallian's conflict more noticeable, provided I made it seem like it's there at all. Mostly, I would like to focus more on Leca'atta and Vallian's relationship. Honestly, there's so much I want to change. Maybe erase Kileagh and Kakkanos. Maybe expand on them, not sure.

Also, I think it's a little amusing that this could definitely just be a fantasy story if I change all of the setting descriptions.

Also also, I'm trying to get this up for the title "Beauty of the Blue Clad", so don't go stealing it… Please.