http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-13262203/seeing-stars Posts in the discussion thread "Seeing Stars" Mon, 11 May 2026 18:15:17 +0000 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-13262203#post-4611004 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-13262203/seeing-stars#post-4611004 Thu, 23 Apr 2020 15:40:17 +0000 RJB_R 1229263 This is a little too all over the place for me, I had a hard time reading it and felt like it was seesawing back and forth between waking and dream, and place to place, without enough connective tissue to allow the reader to suspend disbelief. I think if this were lengthened, and the ideas at play given a little more room to breathe, then it would be vastly improved without really needing to add any new ideas or concepts.

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-13262203#post-4609265 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-13262203/seeing-stars#post-4609265 Wed, 22 Apr 2020 23:41:10 +0000 Sudough Nimm 5843497 Also, thank you very much to the people who gave feedback!

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-13262203#post-4609259 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-13262203/seeing-stars#post-4609259 Wed, 22 Apr 2020 23:32:58 +0000 Sudough Nimm 5843497 This submission loosely used the 20th prompt: "Some sea creatures exist in ways we can't quite see; majestic things, all shimmering waves and countless weeping eyes."

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