Comments for page "The Sea Sings of Hunger"

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Fri, 08 May 2020 04:49:55 +0000

Phenomenal story and scene-setting accompanied by great prose. +1

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Fri, 08 May 2020 04:09:16 +0000

I do still think that the transition from the part with the selkie to the more eldritch stuff could be a bit smoother, but I absolutely love the aesthetic and the overall vibe that I get from this. It paints a picture really nicely.

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Sat, 25 Apr 2020 02:05:15 +0000

Selkies and kelpies and voices in the ocean … it is a shame he couldn't breathe the water.

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Fri, 24 Apr 2020 14:44:47 +0000

His father hits him once, and only once- knocks him backwards in the kitchen, and his hand lands on the whistling teakettle and the skin hisses and breaks apart.

This sentence doesn't make sense to me. Also, replace your hyphens with dashes (—).

Big, quiet Thomas moves, and he catches the swing against the flat of his hand before it is even really started. The metal leaves a long, sooty mark on his palm, and the next morning the mark has turned to a faint purple bruise.

This also doesn't make sense to me, since I don't know why Thomas is involved in this moment.

Besides that, I generally liked this, but I feel like there wasn't enough attention to plot to merit an upvote.

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Fri, 24 Apr 2020 13:04:25 +0000

Prompt: Listen not to the voices from the deep, for they are tainted by malice.

This is my first story on the site! I loved the contest prompts a lot and wanted to write something for them. : )