Comments for page "Hayec-Davm and the Forgetting Plague"

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Tue, 26 Jan 2021 15:12:36 +0000

Really hits the notes of a good old travelling fairytale just right, with the protagonist aquiring seemingly innocuous items along the way that become crucial to their success in the climax. Very creative visuals; I especially Iiked the bridge of birds (side note: readers of this site might enjoy the fantasy novel Bridge of Birds by Barry Hugart), and the ink-lanterns of the squid worshippers . You walked the fine line of imitating the lofty, old-fashioned tone of the language of those tales without laying it on too thick, too.

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Sun, 24 Jan 2021 05:52:22 +0000

I love this one a lot, it's so well done. I didn't expect where the story was going at practically any point, and I loved it. I didn't even expect the traveler at the beginning, and that's the meat of the story. Very well done

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Sat, 23 Jan 2021 17:16:15 +0000

I feel like I just read something out of the Wizard of Oz, The Chronicles of Narnia, or another book from my childhood. It's fun to read and touched my heart. Congratulations, it's brilliant.

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Sat, 23 Jan 2021 06:51:20 +0000

I love it! It's beautiful.

Edit: I feel that this comment doesn't fully express my affection for this piece. You took a pretty basic prompt and turned it around on its head - cities that are not the object of the forgetting, but the location of it. And I love how you used the traveler and the topiary to question whether remembrance or ignorance is ultimately better - because from a deontological perspective it's easy to say that the people should get their memories back. But if those memories are painful, then obligation to the truth would also cause them suffering, just like it does to the traveller…

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many people who had gone to sleep confused as to why they were living together suddenly recalled that they were family.

This just warms my heart right down to the little crevices under the chordae.

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Sat, 23 Jan 2021 05:49:32 +0000

Wow, I really liked this story! The memory plague is a really interesting idea, and I liked the phrasing you used throughout. It feels like a much older story then it is. Excited to read more!

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Sat, 23 Jan 2021 05:23:58 +0000

Credit to One Hundred Years of Solitude by Gabriel García Márquez, to whom I owe much of my inspiration for the idea of a forgetting plague.

And… I really hope this kind of disclaimer isn't necessary, but trying to deliberately contract diseases in real life is generally not a good idea. Please use good judgement.