That being said, really liked both the worldbuilding and the imagery you used here: The idea of seeing the world through the eyes of three types of characters was also an interesting concept.

Overall, I did still like this. +1

No problem!

I'm terrible at formatting and wiki-proceedings in general, but I will attempt to add the theme.
Do I simply add the

[[include :wanderers-library:component:vitalis-llc]]

or the entire block of code at the end?? I feel a little silly for having to ask, so I hope it comes at no inconvenience.

Thanks again!

I found the first and third stories to be much more enjoyable than the second, as it felt more like a transition where all that happened was a conversation.

In the first story, something that grated on me was how many times an anecdote involved mentioning a bodily function, then lampshading it by saying “not really.” You had it for eyes, muscles, hands, using glasses, and nose, which just felt like too much of the same joke.

I really liked the character design, the papier-mâché entity being a highlight for me. I also like a lot of the lore bits you interspersed throughout the stories. Additionally, I did enjoy the attempt to tie the stories into each other, but I felt like the 2nd needed to be stronger for that to work.

I was very close to novoting, but I think I enjoyed it enough to upvote, but please consider implementing some changes I suggested. Also, you should consider adding the Vitalis theme to this page! Here’s a link to the page with the theme

here's my contribution to Vitalis LLC. Happy readin', kind stranger. Hope you like it.