Comments for page "Agnosthesia"

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Wed, 15 Mar 2023 02:37:29 +0000

I… was not expecting to be… as moved by this as I was. Wow. Great job, Teeth.

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Tue, 21 Feb 2023 13:04:43 +0000

Yeah, I can understand it may be a little confusing but the effect I was going for was more like a mirrored reflection. roughly the same amount of lines and syllables taken over the middle line. starting with the adoration for the younger self while shaming the older.

I'm really glad you liked it though!!!

-TEETH

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Mon, 20 Feb 2023 19:06:50 +0000

I generally enjoy it but something just doesn't hit. I get slightly confused halfway through, I guess its because of going opposite way. If my interpretation is correct I really like the last line, I assume its supposed to be your bombshell which works nicely!

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Sun, 19 Feb 2023 05:54:07 +0000

I'm very glad you and others have picked up the emotional note I was really going for here, seeing as near the end of drafting I no longer had most of these feelings from when I started. It started to worry me a bit that the impact of the piece had simply never been there in the first place, but being proved wrong makes me feel so much better about the result. When I first wrote this I really wanted to emphasize the guilt and uncertainty that coursed through me more so than anything else in the poem. I felt that repetition and memory was the best way to convey that. An unforgivable choice between two "evils".

I'm so very happy that you like it, and trust me this is only the first of many to come soon!

-TEETH

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Sun, 19 Feb 2023 05:39:30 +0000

To any confusion on why I put "The raw flesh on the brink of infection," in the beginning there is a method of binding that uses specialized tape usually just called Trans tape. If applied correctly it can flatten down chests better than any binder and nearly make it look like there were never any breasts there at all! it can do wonders in helping people pass.

Sadly it is usually (at least in my experience) never applied as intended due to a lack of instruction, impatience, and or both. If applied incorrectly (Wrapped around the chest, stretched too tight, or if too much is used) however it can cause major ripping at the skin and develop large festering wounds that take multiple weeks to heal. yeah no, not pleasant at all. but with no alternative, I went with the route that hurt me the most.

Every line here has a connection to real moments in my life, some with a bittersweet feel and others painful in more ways than one.

-TEETH

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Sat, 18 Feb 2023 03:09:58 +0000

Very strong emotions here, making for an impressive first post to the site! Your use of repetition is super effective, emphasizing your feelings and making the poem feel more like a whole. Nothing here feels like the "right" choice, it's conflicted it makes me feel conflicted. There is no easy victory here, it hurts but it has to be done. Definitely a poem I'll be keeping in mind

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Fri, 17 Feb 2023 19:44:59 +0000

a beautiful look into the reality of being trans.

Good Job on this Poem Sweet2ooth

Fri, 17 Feb 2023 19:40:30 +0000

Probably one of the best poems i've ever seen!

Good poem

Fri, 17 Feb 2023 15:43:11 +0000

Good ass poem, I relate a bit harder than I’d like to

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Fri, 17 Feb 2023 15:27:23 +0000

This was originally a poem I wrote last year in the depths of my dysphoria, about the guilty feeling of “killing” your younger self. Of the future people put on you, what they wanted for you but not one that you ended up living. To lay to rest the little girl in me and fight with that expectation of future beauty.

I want to give thanks to anyone who helped me with this, including but not limited to Sirslash47 , AmbroseArietes and Piano_WL for early crit and kind words. Thank you all for being patient with my first submission. :3

-TEETH