And wow, after reading, it's really impressive just how much substance this has. You explore character in both the present and the past, with great descriptive language and an introspective narrator that that works very well with the questions you are posing to the audience. On that latter point, I enjoyed how this took a controversial/subversive perspective towards remembering a loved one, and made that into something beautiful. That final line is something you should be proud of, truly.

And here I am again, a year later, saying how much I'm looking forward to your next piece, be it Miracle Musical titled or not.

I wasn't sure if to post it at all, after finishing it, but here I am.

Thank you Ralliston for crit!