Comments for page "Mile High"

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Wed, 07 Jun 2023 21:49:27 +0000

I see what you mean. I think that the main issue was the deadline for the contest, hahaha — if I could make it longer than it is, I definitely would. I'm not sure if this is something Fishish would also want to revisit, but in any case just know I agree entirely and I would implement this if I could. Thanks for the read, minmin!

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Wed, 07 Jun 2023 21:48:09 +0000

Internally: AAAAAAAA RUMETZEN COMMENTED AND I NEVER NOTICED??? MY FAVORITE WL AUTHOR??? AAAAAAAAAAAA

Externally: I'm really glad you liked this, that means a lot!

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Fri, 28 Apr 2023 00:08:43 +0000

Really good stuff here.

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Sun, 23 Apr 2023 10:18:12 +0000

mmm i appreciate what this is doing with format & recognition of like stories as waves, rhythms… think this could go a bit more in like how u rly get into the experience of airline more…? i get that its meant to be monotonous but there is still a lot of room to expand beyond fears, foods… ppl are going places and doing things! ppl are travelling! the vignette format rly can afford to explore a wider range of subject matter & id love 2 see more of that flex

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Sun, 09 Apr 2023 04:28:27 +0000

Oh man, I’m glad you enjoyed! The teddy bear story was my favorite to write, because that actually happened to me, hahaha

Glad you enjoyed it, Snap! Means a whole lot!

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Fri, 07 Apr 2023 21:05:06 +0000

Oh damn there’s so much packed into this piece! I love how you spoke the monotony of airports into the formatting of this piece, from the seemingly endless collapsibles to the repeating stories with slight differences, everything here works toward that feeling

The bear story has gotta be my favorite, it’s so deliciously coincidental and slightly unsettling, but every section brings something different to the table here. Great job!

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Mon, 03 Apr 2023 22:38:24 +0000

This was a fun read. I was surprised by the change of perspective at first, but by the end I enjoyed each separate story tied together with a similar setting and theme. +1

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Mon, 27 Mar 2023 20:39:34 +0000

What an odd piece. It's really damn good, and I loved the way it's presented, which each story only barely connected to each other, jumping from person to persom, from experience to experience, yet following the same thematic.

I'm not sure how to feel about it like, on a deeper level, but reading this was a great experience. Good shit. +1~

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Mon, 27 Mar 2023 14:38:49 +0000

I was completely blindsided by the Airline food part. Great article, +1

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Fri, 24 Mar 2023 23:45:50 +0000

Wow, this is super comprehensive! Glad you liked it, thank you for taking the time to make this!

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Fri, 24 Mar 2023 15:03:09 +0000

Click for Review!

—Oli

Score	Area	Comments:
6	Imagery	Pretty darn good! Very lofi-album-cover-esque vibes, if that makes sense.
5	Theme	Rare? Maybe. Good, subtle themes? Definitely.
6	Flow	Very good: the story feels like you're searching for something, which lends to the theme.
6	Format	As I said, the nested collapsibles are a great, great idea. Really wonderful stuff.
Total: 23

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Fri, 24 Mar 2023 12:18:54 +0000

Styg, thank you so much for this mini-review. Not only am I glad that you enjoyed it, but you also pointed out some things I hadn’t realized even while writing and formatting this!

I’m glad your Airline™ experience was satisfactory. 🤍

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Fri, 24 Mar 2023 03:27:52 +0000

Although this one personally wasn’t for me, I can see the effort and time put into it and appreciate that. Good job.

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Fri, 24 Mar 2023 02:58:56 +0000

Brilliant work. I was unsure if I was gonna like it at first, but a few sentences past the beginning and I was glued. +1.

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Fri, 24 Mar 2023 01:46:21 +0000

Ahah, this was a fun one. Odd convention of thoughts going Inception-style into each other, but one I enjoyed in the end (and started appreciating about three layers in). I absolutely adore the formatting — you worked your tails off for this one. It's almost dreamlike, hazy and fuzzy, looping back in on itself at certain points and spiralling — the airplane experience. The ones in blue I particularly adored — how each paragraph follows a different emotional beat and highlights that without disturbing the colour-undifferentiated narrative is just breathtaking. Gorgeous stuff. And the fact that this is so many stories in one is just *chef's kiss* mwah! glorious. Hats off to you two. I thought that this would be in common, but in retrospect it's absolutely a rare — each of the stories is a distinctly Rare or Uncommon experience to the person experiencing them, even when the casing of that experience seems common. Well done! Soundly delicious work. tastes like cashews in those little Kirkland Signature plastic pouches and some watered-down POG in a waxed paper cup halfway full but also somehow always on the verge of spilling. A distinctly Airline™ work.

Beautiful stuff.

-Styg

Co-Pilot Post

Thu, 23 Mar 2023 23:19:52 +0000

come on now and see the course
that never fields the game of choice
and cold allies of steel
couldn't buy the way it feels
rusty and divided steel
the race is yet to come

"I've always loved airplanes and flight."
~Bill Nye

Hello everyone! This is an entry on behalf of Team Rare for DebateCon2023. Huge thanks to UncannyClown276 for critique, and, gigantic thanks to my co-author Fishish, who really tied this all together. Couldn't have done it without you <3

Hope you all had fun reading! Have a good evening!

(Co)Author Post

Thu, 23 Mar 2023 23:16:02 +0000

Nyeeeeeeeeeeooooooooooooooommmmmm

Plane :)

Loved working with FLOORBOARDS a real one