Comments for page "Blood In The Water" http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333/blood-in-the-water Posts in the discussion thread "Blood In The Water" Mon, 17 Aug 2026 01:50:41 +0000 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333#post-6979225 (no title) http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333/blood-in-the-water#post-6979225 Wed, 07 May 2025 20:38:59 +0000 UncannyClown 9189726 the fourth stanza is a highlight, but most of this failed to impact me very much. a lot of the imagery feels pretty stock, and the rhyme scheme feels like missed opportunity — even though there's a major shift halfway through, it stays exactly the same.

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333#post-6061653 (no title) http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333/blood-in-the-water#post-6061653 Fri, 21 Apr 2023 19:06:14 +0000 Stygian Blue 7679669 The first 3 stanzas and the second to last felt strange to me. The rest were okay. I would have liked to see more on emotion and the processes which stop and the consequences of that. Strips of chicken (sauceless, boiled).

-Styg

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333#post-6061076 +1 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333/blood-in-the-water#post-6061076 Fri, 21 Apr 2023 03:54:45 +0000 Dr Bierre 6155146 My beloved river canon

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333#post-6060996 Author Post http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-15826333/blood-in-the-water#post-6060996 Thu, 20 Apr 2023 21:36:27 +0000 AvocadoMilk 7514791 Wrote this up in a couple hours after discovering what River Canon was! (thanks Guaire)

This is my first contribution to the site! Thanks to my these people for critting or just taking a look: Dr BierreDr Bierre, Cicada3301FanCicada3301Fan and TheDarkArtistTheDarkArtist!

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