Comments for page "The Hawk" http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315/the-hawk Posts in the discussion thread "The Hawk" Sun, 12 Jul 2026 12:20:46 +0000 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315#post-6577374 (no title) http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315/the-hawk#post-6577374 Sun, 28 Jul 2024 18:36:01 +0000 Maxyfran73 7498739 Same agreement on the rushed ending, but I liked the vibe and steps you go through with this piece. It's interesting, and the characters are fairly well defined, although I wish the Hawk got more protagonism to themselves. All in all, however, it reflects the act of caring for an injured bird and letting them go once they're healed pretty well, which I appreciated. Fun stuff. +1~

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315#post-6545110 (no title) http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315/the-hawk#post-6545110 Tue, 18 Jun 2024 19:18:58 +0000 zipzipskins 5558639 definitely agree with snap's crit here that the ending didn't quite earn its keep. there are also some style things that could use touching up, beyond spag. regardless, the characterization and description are very strong, and you have a very clear folktale-style voice that shines through, with a surprising amount of emotional impact in a very short time frame. bravo! welcome to the site. happy to have you here.

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315#post-6542628 (no title) http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315/the-hawk#post-6542628 Mon, 17 Jun 2024 02:46:33 +0000 Lightf00t 7808809 Thank you so much! I agree on the rushed ending . I would've put more but i was getting pissed at it so I just called it

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315#post-6542341 (no title) http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-16864315/the-hawk#post-6542341 Sun, 16 Jun 2024 23:30:52 +0000 Snapdragon133 5193476 I quite like this, all of your characters are really charming and you tell a sweet but sad story. I do feel like you really rushed towards the ending though, you summarized a ton of the time Sigrún and Hawk have together, and I feel like you could've delved into all sorts of details about their relationship that would've really elevated the piece. As it stands now, I do feel that tension/charisma between them, which is a huge credit to your skill writing a relationship like this, but I did leave wanting more. However, what's here was very enjoyable and time well spent for me, so +1!

(Also the Whispering Willow is a very cool title for a witch)

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