Comments for page "respiration of a haunted house"

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Mon, 29 Jul 2024 17:23:21 +0000

I was not expecting this to be this good, and then I got to those last few lines and the picture etched itself on my brain. Excellent.

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Sat, 27 Jul 2024 21:46:18 +0000

Such a solid short piece; simple, but so visceral in what it accomplishes. Love it. +1~

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Fri, 12 Jul 2024 21:02:36 +0000

i enjoy the way that this piece contrasts the visceral with the stale, and the final lines have a nice punch to them. the art is also nice. one criticism: i don't care for the opening lines. the voice in those lines feels noticeably different from the rest of the piece, and it gave me the impression that the piece was going to be something other than what it actually was. i also think that the description of what the house really is could be slightly stronger. other than that, nice work.

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Fri, 12 Jul 2024 17:47:34 +0000

Ah, lovely! The detail on this is sublime, sweet like coconut. Very good, well done, et cetera — this is splendid. So well written, and I love anatomy and thoughts of abandoned places. This is a cruffin, or maybe a yogurt parfait.

Styg

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Fri, 12 Jul 2024 15:11:34 +0000

Wonderful exhualtations of the respiration. Dancing across the tongue with spice and sadness. Walls painted blue by the self. I love this piece, and I'm happy to see it posted here. A start of something beautiful.

— Avalon