Crit Request: man as rock http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-17861065/crit-request:man-as-rock Posts in the discussion thread "Crit Request: man as rock" Fri, 17 Jul 2026 02:09:57 +0000 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-17861065#post-8012428 Re: Crit Request: man as rock http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-17861065/crit-request:man-as-rock#post-8012428 Fri, 08 May 2026 15:36:26 +0000 Plilt 876026 I don't mind the all lowercase, but "im" and "ill" should have apostrophes in them.

just for a moment.

Shouldn't have a period at the end; none of your other sentences do. You might even consider removing the question mark from the first line.

Other than that, I don't have much useful advice. The imagery works okay, at least to me. Someone who does more poetry can probably give you better critique regarding it than I can.

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short maybe-poem I wrote while miserable. I hope it conveys properly

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