That being said, I think I will try and expand on to this 'tale' I would call it, as I am so used to calling such stories, and continue to write on hopefully expanding the narrator's personality. What I wanted to accomplish with this draft is to get a feel of what people would think of my certain way of writing and storytelling. Hopefully as I expand onto this first part of the draft it will unfold into the brilliant tale I want it to be.

Thanks again, I'll be in my corner writing more stuff.

It's an O5 (presumably?) in the Library, dicking around, and then mentioning that he's an O5. I assume that this is intended to be the first part of a series of some kind? If so, you need to give the reader a reason to care about the goings-on beyond "it's a story and you should like the narrator." No one has any personality beyond the narrator ("bookish, isolated," which don't really tell us much about him) and the "Warden" (mysterious). There's no action in the second half, and for someone who runs the Foundation, the Warden is pretty dang lax about keeping secrets.

That being said, I think that this could be interesting. I would like to do a line-by-line critique of this, but I really dislike doing it on the forums. If you hop onto IRC and the #wandererslibrary channel, I'll be happy to talk with you about it.

Critique and advice welcome!