Make like a tree.

Re: Make like a tree.

Sun, 28 Apr 2013 21:08:45 +0000

I see. I will try trimming a bit and make it fit better.

Re: Make like a tree.

Sun, 28 Apr 2013 13:29:33 +0000

I meant the second paragraph of the first part.

I got what it was for, I just think it should be shorter, because Father Dwayne is already characterized quite a bit it later parts.

Re: Make like a tree.

Sun, 28 Apr 2013 13:18:22 +0000

Thank you. I’m not sure if you mean 2d paragraph of the first part, or the paragraph of 2nd picture?

+ Here is an explanation of the whole.

Re: Make like a tree.

Sun, 28 Apr 2013 01:52:55 +0000

I like it.

I don't think the second paragraph fits with the rest, though.

Re: It's a small world.

Sun, 28 Apr 2013 00:58:03 +0000

Here is a New!, Improved! draft. It's now much more leafy, and the pictures are smaller and collapsible.

The words “suffusion of yellow” and the reference to a cat flap are, of course, a tribute to Douglas Adams. In a sense, it's a story about the interconnectedness of all trees…

Re: It's a small world.

Mon, 18 Mar 2013 12:04:53 +0000

Thanks to the both of you for reading it. I will increase the content as you suggest.

I liked the idea of just a few photographs with cryptic comments written on the back, but that may not work so well. I will turn it into a more detailed journal.

Re: It's a small world.

Mon, 18 Mar 2013 07:46:55 +0000

Agreeing. Frankly, the images feel almost extraneous. They don't provide enough padding, and when you take them away, you have about 100 words of content. I would advise reducing the images to small, right-aligned items present in only a portion of entries, rather than making them the main focus.

I would be happy to re-evaluate this when you increase the content.

Re: It's a small world.

Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:58:21 +0000

It's not bad, but there's not nearly enough there. In addition, the photographs themselves are very blah and the captions fail to provide any real hook.

It's a small world.

Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:45:04 +0000

Hello! With my new library card in hand, I would like to ask for comments on this New Document I just produced. (I haven't been in chat yet. Maybe some day when I feel chatty.)