New Story... Open for constructive criticism http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850/new-story-open-for-constructive-criticism Posts in the discussion thread "New Story... Open for constructive criticism" - What goes around, comes around... Sun, 10 May 2026 14:06:10 +0000 http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850#post-1804784 Re: New Story... Open for constructive criticism http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850/new-story-open-for-constructive-criticism#post-1804784 Wed, 26 Jun 2013 20:27:21 +0000 MadCatUSA 1260716 Thanks for the feedback Vivax… As you said, it's not anywhere near complete. It's a start for me. It's an idea that's been banging around in my head for a long time now and I wanted to get it down in some form. I'm still working on the rest.

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850#post-1799193 Re: New Story... Open for constructive criticism http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850/new-story-open-for-constructive-criticism#post-1799193 Tue, 18 Jun 2013 15:04:44 +0000 Vivax 1492378 At the moment what you have is a madman's scrawl on a stratum of igneous rock with references to bone meal or something in the later layers. This needs a story. This needs some sense too because I can't figure out how you'd determine that those chemicals came from human bones as opposed to say bones in general.

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850#post-1794670 Re: New Story... Open for constructive criticism http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850/new-story-open-for-constructive-criticism#post-1794670 Tue, 11 Jun 2013 21:51:43 +0000 MadCatUSA 1260716 My apologies for not using the sandbox. I will correct. As for the writing, ideas for improvement?

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850#post-1794583 Re: New Story... Open for constructive criticism http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850/new-story-open-for-constructive-criticism#post-1794583 Tue, 11 Jun 2013 19:12:00 +0000 rumetzen 209204 No drafts in the forums please. Set up a sandbox (http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/), put it there, and post the link here.

I don't find the idea or the writing particularly compelling, and it's way too short.

]]> http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850#post-1794410 New Story... Open for constructive criticism http://wanderers-library.wikidot.com/forum/t-660850/new-story-open-for-constructive-criticism#post-1794410 Tue, 11 Jun 2013 16:09:53 +0000 MadCatUSA 1260716 http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/madcatusa

*** Corrected to be link to Sandbox article instead of full story.

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