A Simple Short that I wrote.

Re: A Simple Short that I wrote.

Fri, 09 May 2014 05:50:48 +0000

Thanks for the advice. I'm still thinking of what to add more for the story. Hope this works.

Re: A Simple Short that I wrote.

Wed, 07 May 2014 18:18:28 +0000

Gonna second roget in that it is far too short. If you added some real meat to it, possibly expanded on each aspect, it could be really good, you do seem to get the wistful tone down however.

Re: A Simple Short that I wrote.

Sun, 04 May 2014 12:51:30 +0000

To tell you the truth, I'm not sure myself, maybe I should re write it to make it more poem-ish…

Re: A Simple Short that I wrote.

Sat, 03 May 2014 23:46:07 +0000

That's what I wasn't sure about. I didn't know if it was supposed to be a poem or something else. I rather enjoy the writing itself but I'm not sure I understand what it's supposed to be about, unless I'm missing some cultural reference.

Re: A Simple Short that I wrote.

Sat, 03 May 2014 17:48:55 +0000

That's the point, a simple short, I could redo it as a poem maybe.

Re: A Simple Short that I wrote.

Sat, 03 May 2014 17:34:28 +0000

Way, way too short. Needs a lot more, this barely feels like an outline.

A Simple Short that I wrote.

Fri, 02 May 2014 03:14:48 +0000

So I've written this out of the blue and well yeah, is this alright or does it need more?

http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/greene-s-sandbox