Love this and how you wrote it! The way you merged sentences with commas may not be accepted in a school/workplace, but it definitely added to your writing style here and the tone of the writing. Simple enough to read through easily, but flexible enough to where it can definitely lead on to other great stories. I would suggest adding more transition/description between the events that happen (like when Viv admires their statue, but their mom disagrees), since it would definitely help change the mood a bit more.
+1, Cool Post, Write Some More Soon
NOTE: A way to edit your writing so it's more "correct" is by using semi-colons (;) instead of commas when you merge sentences. Still like what you did though!