More paragraph breaks please
I like the story itself. You fixed most of the problems I mentioned before, and a few of the scenes in this, mainly the reveal in the end and fresco scene, are simply awesome. The only issues I have with the text itself is that it's still pretty purple prosy and it has some repetition, but those don't personally affect my enjoyment of the story.
That said, this still has way too few paragraph breaks. Especially since it's quite a long story, a wall of text like that is pretty hard and tiresome to read. No vote for now, but if you break the paragraphs apart a little, I'll gladly change that to a +1.