Some changes to the structure of the draft.
1. I need to change the progression of which organs the story gets. I need to start with the vital organs, then start to add in more and more complex organs, until the "story gets his wings". Right now, the buildup of which organs he attains is practically non-existent.
2. Make the "story" actually do stuff. Right now, the story just goes "Oh look, I have a brain now" or "Oh, a heart? Where did that come from?" I want the organs to impact how the "story" functions, such as a brain causing him to be more wary of his surroundings. Hopefully, this will cause the reader to think of the "story" as more than a guy who just stands around, doing nothing.
3. I want the setting of the story to evolve along with the "story" A desolate landscape with nothing to do in it is pretty boring. At first, the pocket dimension the "story" resides in is empty, but soon, once the story actually starts progressing, the place is filled with lush wildlife and greenery.
4. As for the actual story the author is writing, I intend for it to be a short fable. The story follows a boy who is able to communicate with trees. Over the course of his lifetime, he teaches them how to hunt and trap animals. This leads to the creation of carnivorous plants such as Venus Fly Traps and Pitcher Plants.
5. Once the "story" enters the real world, I want him to react to the plants and wildlife. Perhaps with the young man being to communicate with plants, the story will attempt to engage in a conversation with a tree. I don't intend for this last section being too long, however, as I intend for the story to be mainly about the "story" development.
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