My Thoughts Are Not My Own / Discussion

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JakdragonX 26 Jan 2021 04:55

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This is my second entry into the WL Scavenger Hunt, with the theme being centered around "Alien Invasions." If you're here, and you're wondering about something concerning this article, please look below for a few clarifications:

Spoilers Ahead!

1. This is story, along with Daddy Is My Superhero, both directly correlate.
2. The beginning scene of this story is NOT the narrator escaping a mental hospital or an actual prison. Its just the hospital, after watching his daughter in the first story die in front of him.
3. This story is not intended to be as emotionally impactful as Daddy Is My Superhero. It was meant to seem more meandering and introspective. I decided to keep the format of both pieces alike to reflect how similar the daughter and this narrator are.
4. The Him in the final sentence is not a physical, separate entity. It's actually the narrator, but instead his "darker" side. Pay attention to all of the other times where the "My thoughts are not my own" is mentioned. It's always right after he says something negative or malicious. The final sentence was intended to reflect that he was trying to move from such bad tendencies and go back to his previously optimistic side.

I hope you enjoy! Stay tuned for Part 3!

Last edited on 26 Jan 2021 21:02 by JakdragonX Show more

yoyoflux 26 Jan 2021 16:56

your imagery continues to amaze me, wikidot user JakdragonX

Snapdragon133 02 Feb 2021 22:42

Very creative turn on the prompt once again, and very worrying continuation of the story (that's meant as a compliment). Get's a +1 from me, very interested to see how this all plays out

do_the_right_thing 11 Feb 2021 01:42

The repetition in the paragraph structures made this a struggle for me to enjoy, I felt repeatedly disarmed from my attempts to be immersed in your very good imagery. Eventually though, I was successful.

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Spoon!

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Maxyfran73 19 Jun 2022 21:04

You may say it's not as emotionally impactful as 'Daddy is my superhero' but this was as impactful, if not even more, because, well, I'm not a child, so I can empathize more with the dark thoughts depicted here. It's quite interesting, the phrase repeated here is quite helpful to show us the state the man is going through, that self-alienation that escalates and escalates until he cannot be sure why he does the things he's doing.

Really good writing. +1~