To preclude any discouragement, this is a really great start to a story, and has a ton of potential. That being said, there are a few issues that are preventing it from being a very successful article right now.
The first is the formatting. Simply put, you're going to want to start a new spaced paragraph with every piece of dialogue. This is a common practice in writing like this, because it does a lot of things to make the reader's experience subtly but significantly better. I won't list all of them, but it basically just makes it easier to read. A few other very small formatting changes that you'll notice for yourself upon reread, and this will be in much better visual shape.
The second is that, as I said, this is a start of a story, but doesn't have quite enough more than that. The reader gets to the end and is left in a weird space where it doesn't seem like there's going to be more, but feeling like there really should be a lot more. I'd say there's a ton of "space" left in this for characterization of your two speaking roles. Then, once you introduce a more actionable conflict, I'm sure that the writing will flow and you'll have a much more narratively significant story to work with.
Happy writing!
-Piano