Ghostly Guide to Self-Improvement / Discussion

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Feedback Welcome

Naleth 01 May 2021 16:55

Hi everyone! This is only my second story here so feel free to give any feedback. Special thanks to @Skipmeister for reading the earlier draft, but any bad writing is purely mine.

Appreciated!

Edit: I got a great suggestion from ThePianoMan1616 below to add more references to the story. If anyone has seen any real stories here in the library that would fit, or comes up with some funny titles and authors, feel free to post them below. I'll take some ones I feel can integrate and put them in to make it better. I love linking to other stories anyways.

Edit 2: I tried to add in some other titles, but in the end I felt they messed with the pace a bit and I wasn't quite able to make it sound right. So I guess I'll leave them out for now until I improve my skills. That said, if anyone wants one of their pieces included as a cross reference please let me know! I love linking to other articles.

Cheers!

Last edited on 13 Jun 2021 21:29 by Naleth Show more

Piano_WL 01 May 2021 18:01

Absolutely adore the tone you've crafted here, I was smiling the whole time. The jokes are well timed and spaced, and the continuous references to the author's own death weren't heavy handed.

If I had to come up with one negative thing, it would be that the introduction said the article would make reference to other resources, but I didn't see as much of that happening as I was expecting. Even if the things you're referencing don't actually exist, you could always just say, like, "find further reading on the difference between Terror and Horror in 'The King of the Scare: Psychological tips for Efficient Spooking'" or whatever.

Other than that minor complaint, you've got a fantastic personal style going, including your other work. Keep at it!

Naleth 02 May 2021 14:32

Hi Pianoman,

Thanks so much for your feedback and I'm flattered you read both pieces. I'm still refining my style slowly, but time brings improvements. What you suggested is a great idea about referencing other sources too. I'll see about coming up with a couple fun ideas for titles and authors. I'll also modify the first post on this thread with a call if anyone wants to contribute ideas or suggest crosslinks.

Thanks!
Naleth

Machen2 09 May 2021 17:13

I liked this. The jokes were good, and it's about the afterlife, which I did bother original, and fun.

Snapdragon133 19 May 2021 23:50

This is a wonderful piece, it's both funny and dark, which is just a great combo. I liked the links to other pieces, a good balance of old and new as well

Malvarik1 18 Jun 2021 09:06

Really loved this piece. Tone was great and the formatting was well done. Nice job!

Nils Severin 29 Aug 2022 17:20

Great enjoyment, great world-building and some unexpected information from the inside of the spiritual world. Some pieces of this article had me cracking. Upvote!