A Bud fears Bloom, Leaves blocking its View / Discussion

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And so, the journey starts

Maxyfran73 17 Aug 2021 18:25

Aight, with this, team Heaven and Earth and the author Tianhong are officially in Wandercon! Nice!

This is also my first work posted on the site and like, ever. Fairly nervous about this but so be it. Tried my best. Look forward to more stuff from the team~

Also, 'bout the images used

Tianhong's seal was drawn by me!

The "Old paper" texture, meanwhile, is from Lost and Taken

Very nice!

Doctor Pann 17 Aug 2021 19:17

This is very atmospheric, and I think you did a great job with instilling a sense of wonder and whimsy with the language choices. I may have noticed a couple of grammar/word choice issues, but it was nothing too problematic or anything that pulled me out of the story. I am very interested to see what Tianhong does next, and I must say you did a great job! Can't wait to see what you do next.

P.S. I really liked the poem too, and I think it helped characterize Tianhong well.

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Re: Very nice!

Maxyfran73 17 Aug 2021 20:34

Thanks for the kind words! I'm happy that mystic sense of wonder did get through; was a tad nervous it wouldn't work out.

Glad you liked the poem as well!

Snapdragon133 17 Aug 2021 19:31

Really liked the format, this piece feels very put together and intentional. The mix of the poem and the narrative is great, and I like that stamp at the end too. Good tea metaphor

Maxyfran73 17 Aug 2021 20:44

Thanks! Glad it does feel put together~

Also happy you like the stamp. Wanted to give the piece the feeling that it was written long ago, or at least accent the feel of the piece with befitting imagery; I think it worked well.

CrossYM 18 Aug 2021 03:32

Oh my, a Chinese though I am, yet I really have no idea what the Crying Dragon, the Minted Castle or the state of Luopan are. Are they real legends or cities in western China or simply created by you?
Don't misunderstand me. I'm not criticizing your job.I like it. I just want to take a further step into this article. And as you see, my lack of knowledge is literally severe (qwq).

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Merci.

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Maxyfran73 18 Aug 2021 04:01

Hello! Glad you liked the tale! And don't worry about any lack of knowledge, all these were created by me. They are not part of any legend or actual history, not that I know of anyway.

+1

fora-mina 17 Sep 2023 16:02

Bai Ze needs a hug