I Cannot Recall My First Thought / Discussion

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Limeyy 09 Sep 2021 21:27

The first entry of Cyren Pligmolon, my first entry on the WL and my first attempt at prose since GCSE English. This was a blast to write, hope y'all enjoy reading it as much as I did writing it.

Endless thanks to my critters:
DodoDevil
Dysadron
William AO
AnActualCrow

EDIT: oh shit licensing
https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/7e541df5-9359-4912-8d5c-6385d439ba89 - Cairn
https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/bde9bb63-4ccb-4757-9121-79870500d33c - tower
https://www.flickr.com/photos/h_duncan/51360074414/ - spires

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(account deleted) 10 Sep 2021 13:21

This, this is beautiful +1

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—j.w

DodoDevil 10 Sep 2021 19:50

This is a really enjoyable piece. The imagery is evocative and builds on itself in a followable and engaging way. The return to the cairn at the end serves to both bring the piece back to the beginning and recontextualize what's being depicted in a compelling way.

+1, certainly worth applying to the WL over.

Whitehills 11 Sep 2021 02:09

This has definitely got those nice Wanderer vibes I always love to see, immortals being unable to recall memories far back in time is something I always found fascinating and wanted to explore, but never had the confidence to write such a piece, this does just that, and in a beatiful way.

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-Wanderheil

Rounderhouse 13 Sep 2021 11:23

#1

The imagery on display here is incredibly evocative. The piece absolutely drips with atmosphere and mood — it lacks a little in substance but it more than makes up for it in sheer vibes. You can feel the melancholy of the narrator. The use of images also helps a lot to break up and arrange the text. This is the my first story read from the Sole Singularity team, and is an incredibly strong start.

LAN 2D 13 Sep 2021 20:38

This piece was really impressive, in more ways than one. The way you used images interspersed with the recurring "I cannot recall my first thought" lines, the personal but distant voice of the author and the shortness of the piece work well together to create a really memorable and vivid atmosphere.

I'm definitely reading the rest of this series.

Maxyfran73 14 Sep 2021 00:54

This is a very interesting way to picture the post-Singularity world: A collage of related vignettes trying to make sense of something that no longer is able to fully fit together as a cohesive piece. I really like the way this piece utilizes the 'show, don't tell' resource. It helps one familiarize with the universe this is set in.

Very excited to read the rest of Pligmolon's work. +1~

UncertaintyCrossing 14 Sep 2021 21:04

Love the imagery and surreal vibes this piece has. Echoing Rounder that as the first piece I've read for this team, it was an incredibly strong start that's hooked me in to read the rest. Very well done! Has my plus one.

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But the time flies, irretrievable.

rumetzen 20 Sep 2021 00:02

Very nice, your prose is very tight and evocative, and the events focused on here are tantalizingly mysterious without being overly vague. The atmosphere you create here is really powerful.

Grendelnacht 30 Oct 2021 17:25

I have no words. It is quite simply amazing.