This is my first post, and an entry for the 2021 wandercon! Please, don't hesitate on telling me what you think.
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I like it, the beginning of the article is a bit weak, but by the time I got to the transmission I already knew it was good. Is Semeliel an AI? I could certainly be wrong but it seemed like that to me Anyway, can't wait to read more ;P
-Wanderheil
Thank you for your feedback! I understand your stance on the beginning and I agree. Repetition is a great resource in terms of how efficiently it can get a message across, but it also has the very real potential of boring or alienating the reader. That's why I made sure to use it sparingly, and to mix it up as soon as I felt I had established enough of a pattern for the deviations to be impactful.
As for Semeliel's nature… You'll learn more while reading my teammates' entries!
This one is good. I like the repetitiveness because it sells on the 'unique' parts more. It's also interesting to see this… Space probe (?) gain sapience, or at least show it. Finally, the letter was really good, and the parts after were as well.
I'm intrigued by this Semeliel fella. For now tho, +1~
Your first post? This is a wonderful first post and I'm excited to see how you progress as an author from here! I enjoyed the voice and sense of longing Semeliel has, and I think the letter did a good job showing what she's reaching for and that it's something worth reaching for. +1
But the time flies, irretrievable.
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my entry. I wanted to focus on the way Semeliel herself is shaped by the transmissions she receives, and I'm glad both her sections and the letter worked well in tandem for you.
By the way, thank you for the shoutout on the Discord chat. That really made my week :)
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