Simply Shall Not Be / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page Simply Shall Not Be.

JakdragonX 11 Sep 2021 21:49

no idea if this one works tbh lol

https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/b62fce66-e737-4eec-978a-77c4f13d3973

https://www.flickr.com/photos/11001648@N00/190101021

https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/b0334c82-f2f4-4b38-aeec-e64214a6bf52

Rounderhouse 14 Sep 2021 20:56

#5

Ooh, worldbuilding. Saucy. Don't have a ton to say about this one. I think the imagery is a little bit weaker than the other ones, and the long meandering sentences aren't surreal in this article so much as they are waxing poetic. Kind of aimless. But it is more grounded than the others, and I can sense a shift in our nice old narrator - maybe he's sick of wandering the Singularity? Sick of not being in the Singularity?

UncertaintyCrossing 14 Sep 2021 21:31

Agreeing that the imagery is a little weaker in this one, but the worldbuilding and shift we get in our narrator more than make up for it. I'm also a fan of the topics discussed in this entry, and I'm still very much curious to see how the story continues. Solid piece, another plus one here.

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But the time flies, irretrievable.

Maxyfran73 16 Sep 2021 01:13

I have to agree that this piece feels odd compared to the rest of the work: It's less surreal than the rest. That doesn't takes any value away, of course: I appreciate that feeling of being grounded, that things make more sense than usual, even if, at the same time, this much 'sense' feels almost antithetical to the author's theme.

Does this makes this article bad though? God no, it's a really good piece, with really interesting worldbuilding. It feels somewhat off, but it's still deserving of an upvote.