The World Is Burning Down Around Me / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page The World Is Burning Down Around Me.

ANALO-001-1 21 Oct 2021 05:04

If you want to check that the picture in my article has copyright I assure you it doesn´t and is in the public domain, and if you want to check it for yourself here https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:New_York_Public_Library_Original_Declaration_of_Independence_Page_2.jpg

ANALO-001-1 21 Oct 2021 05:08

hello? anybody?

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ANALO-001-1 21 Oct 2021 05:07

I would love some criticism on my article, and this is my first article on this site so if there are any formating mistakes can you please inform me. Thank you!

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Snapdragon133 01 Nov 2021 22:04

Allow me to explain my downvote.

To start off, this concept is not bad. I specifically enjoyed the phrase The World Is Burning Down Around Us, and I could see it as an effective motto or call to action.

Unfortunately, this article came up short for me. The first half being all bold isn’t very appealing, to start. I also felt like this document really should’ve been longer, maybe stating their goals or really anything other than what reads like an introduction. Finally, there are just too many grammatical mistakes plus the writing feels very stilted in places. I would really recommend trying reading your works out loud to catch many mistakes you wouldn’t if you just read silently.

We really encourage seeking critique before posting, which can either be done in the forums or on the discord. I’d still really like to see you continue writing here, but this one needs some work before I feel comfortable upvoting

More Power 25 Nov 2021 20:20

Any mention of Big Red (“The King of the Darkness Below” here) is good for me

Maxyfran73 28 Jul 2024 16:12

Have to agree with Snap on this one; it's a solid idea, but the execution leaves a lot to be desired. There's just not enough meat to chew, to justify its existence as it stands. -1