Looking for crit on the only story here.
This is supposed to be a sort of sequel to Even an Oni is Fond of Chinese Poetry, narrated by The Silver'd Fabulist. If you could check both beforehand, that'd be neat, but I think it should be able to be read without needing these (Albeit a read of at least one entry of the Alaggadan storyteller would be appreciated for the way the sentences here are constructed.)
Points I'm worried about:
- Does it feel like an entry for the Silver'd Fabulist?
- Does it reads coherently? The Fabulist uses uh, a language that is at times hard to follow, so I want to make sure the flow isn't a total mess.
- Did I use the word 'beast' too much? I feel like that's the case, but not too sure.
More general worries exist, such as 'is it good?' and 'Is it written good?' but those aren't specific enough, of course.
Ultimately, any feedback helps~
