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This is mainly gonna be a thread for staff use. For those of you unaware, whenever an article gets deleted for whatever reason, we log the title, reason, and author. This is for their reference, our reference, and general record keeping.
We also P.M. users if/when their articles get deleted, and include direct links to the forum post with their deletion record, all of which will henceforth lead here.
I was working on it yesterday and then come back to continue to find it gone… Why was it deleted?..
Your piece was deleted for falling below the voting threshold. You can view all the information in the collapsible on the post below
Deletions - 2021-12-01
"Patient 237" by Felixou has been deleted at -5
Feedback from Grendelnacht:
I really loved that twist in the end. It's a fairly good piece, but you do need to clean up the grammar. Sometimes the tense shifts and a couple of sentences don't flow as well as they could. I do love the voice of the narrator, that was well done as well. I'm eager to see what you can create out of this interesting idea.
Feedback from rumetzen:
There's nothing wrong with the idea or story, though it is kind of forgettable. The main issue is that the writing needs a LOT of work. It has no flow or rhythm, it feels juvenile in a lot of places, and it overuses things like capitalization and exclamation points to create excitement instead of building tension and release organically. This will be deleted soon, but ping me in the discord or send me a DM through Wikidot and I can help work with you on the writing style in more detail.
"[The One Who Rewrites All]" by Mr_Andeu has been deleted at -4
Feedback from UncertaintyCrossing:
There's a lot of creativity behind this story and I do think the narrator is interesting! That being said, the grammar issues (double periods at the end of sentences, run on sentences, certain words and acronyms not being capitalized) and the fact this story is trying to do so much all at once is making the tale incredibly hard to follow. I'd recommend picking one thing to focus on and really driving that home. Additionally, while WL does share a universe with SCP, we tend to focus less on the Foundation/SCPs/MTF/all of that here. I'm wondering if after some polish, this story might have a better home on the SCP Wiki?
Whatever path you decide to follow, I'd recommend utilizing either our critique forums or joining the Discord chat for further feedback and assistance with your writing.
Best of luck!
Deletions - 2021-12-08
"The princess of many crowns" by Dr_Foretoken does not match any existing user name has been deleted at -5, as well as for being an incomplete page and possible copyright infringement.
Feedback from UncertaintyCrossing (echoed by staff):
Heya Wanderer!
Please make sure to only post completed works to the site. If wanting to work on drafts, please make a page on the sandbox site and work on it there. We have a feedback forum and Discord server where you can get critique.
Additionally, make sure the images you use are compatible with the CC BY-SA 3.0 license, and are credited properly.
Deletions - 2021-12-22
"Neighborhood Diety's And Local Peasants" by StrangeFellows has been deleted at -8 for falling below the voting threshold and for being an incomplete page.
Feedback from Snapdragon133:
Please do not post unfinished pages to the wiki, we have the sandboxes for working on drafts
"And then, the sun went down." by ExiledSentinel has been deleted at -6 for falling below the voting threshold.
Feedback from NotAnOligarch
Twas a dreary night,
should be 'Twas
Been dusk for awhile
should be It had been dusk for awhile. Though I don't think this is technically grammatically incorrect, it is slightly incoherent. I'd recommend rearranging the entire line.
"why…why hasn't the sun set yet?"
should be Why… (a space after the ellipsis) Why (I believe capitalization after an ellipsis is optional, but I tend to do it). I'm not sure this should be an ellipsis. An Em Dash (like this: —) would suit the situation better I believe.
Alrighty, this is a nice piece, but I have a few problems with it.
1.) I think this work would benefit from more verse-style spacing.
I.e.:
Example, example example.
Example, still an example. This is an example.
I'm hoping this example works and tells you what I mean.
Example. Exampling example sample the example.Like that. As of right now, the work is difficult to read. It's so short, I think it could benefit from some proper formatting.
2.) It's short. That's not necessarily a bad thing, but I don't think this piece adds to the Library. It's sorta a nothing-burger. There's little to nothing there here. No meat to the story. In food terms, this is like presenting me a sandwich comprised completely of lettuce. This work is comprised completely of mystery. There's nothing to really critique.
3.) I'm not sure how much critique you've been given but I'm not sure if this is even a finished work. I'd recommend using the Library Sandbox and workshopping some ideas at the Ideas and Advice forum here on the site.
4.) Reminder to add a rating module! Code is as follows, simply copy it and paste it directly into the work.
[[>]]
[[module Rate]]
[[/>]]Again, coldposting is usually frowned upon (though I'm a previous offender myself, so I don't blame you.), and the Ideas and Advice forum is a great help!
I unfortunately have to downvote it as of right now, but hope to see more writing in the future!—NotAnOligarch
Deletions - 2021-12-22
"The Girl In The Cloak Of A Thousand Furs" by The Prinzessin at -0 has been deleted under the plagiarism clause
Feedback from NotAnOligarch
https://sites.pitt.edu/~dash/grimm065.html
That right there is the original work. This piece is heavily plagiarizing the original tale by the Brothers Grimm.
I'd like to highlight two sections. One from the original, the other from this work.
From the original, All-Kinds-of-Fur:
Hoping to dissuade him from his intentions, she said to him, "Before I fulfill your wish, I must have three dresses: one as golden as the sun, one as silver as the moon, and one that glistens like the stars. Further, I must have a cloak put together from a thousand kinds of pelts and fur. Every animal in your kingdom must contribute a piece of its skin for it."
From this work, The Girl In The Cloak Of A Thousand Furs:
Hoping to dissuade him from his intentions, she said to him, "Before I fulfill your wish, I will have three dresses: one as golden as the sun, one as silver as the moon, and one that glistens like the stars. Furthermore, I ask for a cloak put together from a thousand kinds of pelts and fur. Every animal in your kingdom must contribute to it."
As is clearly demonstrated, the works are near identical. I encourage you real the original, not only because it is quite good, but also to see further how utterly copied this is from the original. There's a difference between something inspired by and something copied from.
I'm aware this story claims to be a "rewrite", but it's just blatant plagiarism.I would like to cite the Site Rules, Section III, bullet-point 4 (that felt amazing to type):
Plagiarism is strictly against the rules. If you are found to have plagiarized an on or offsite work and posted it to our site, it is grounds for an immediate permanent ban and removal of the work in question.
I'm not sure if you had knowledge of this, The Prinzessin, but ignorance of the rules does not provide immunity to the rules.
Thank you.
Deletions - 2022-01-02
"Watch the Dust" by Allej Finoric has been deleted at -5 for falling below the rating threshold.
Feedback from dr nepalwala:
Please make test pages in the sandbox and not in main site.
"bit by bit by bite - Greed is a Red Thing" by Allej Finoric has been deleted at -4 for falling below the rating threshold.
Feedback from Snapdragon133:
This piece, for me, fails to evoke a sense of emotion. Like, the red stuff doesn't feel that impactful, so when it ends off with that last line, it doesn't really land. The two parts of this piece, the black text and the blue+yellow text, also don't really seem to relate until the very end, and it's a fairly weak connection at that. Additionally, the yellow text is hard on the eye.
You should really consider getting critique before posting, there are multiple avenues to getting that crit.
"Jouissance (Unfinished)" by Allej Finoric has been deleted at -4 for falling below the rating threshold.
Feedback from NotAnOligarch:
Reminder: The Library is not a home for unfinished pages! Please use the Sandbox site to draft works! I would advise you remove this work after moving it to the sandbox, as unfinished pages like this always get deleted by staff anyway.
Another reminder, you should always submit your (finished) draft to either the discord or the Ideas and Advice Forum!
But no worries! Mistakes happen to the best of us!
I hope you'll post this after it's finished, if it's well received by reviewers!Thanks,
—Oligarch.
Deletions - 2022-01-09
"The Viewer" by Dr_Sinder has been deleted at -11 for falling below the deletion threshold.
Feedback from Plilt
This is not very good.
The quality of writing is mediocre, with numerous spelling and grammatical mistakes. It's mostly uninteresting exposition and the tone comes off as overly edgy (mysterious enigmatic vengeful vastly powerful narrator, brutal death), and the narrator is pointlessly enigmatic; the dialogue isn't compelling and comes across as unrealistic. Why is the Foundation member reminding the other Foundation member of why they exist?
The stated point to the Viewer's actions don't line up with what they're actually doing—how is letting a homicidal statue kill people advancing their goals?
Feedback from ThePianoMan1616
Plilt's comment was neither overly opinionated nor out of line, nor false. It was measured, honest, and very accurate.
"This is not very good" is a value statement in that Plilt expressed an opinion, which they have every right to do. As a writing site, we have an obligation to communicate honestly with one another about the quality of the work we produce. If writing is not good, which this isn't, it is downright dishonest to not be clear about it. If you'd prefer it not expressed in value statements, look no further than the details which follow shortly *after* the value statement. The piece is filled with grammatical errors which make the reading experience difficult. The format also makes it difficult to read, and the "dialogue" is written in such a way that it does not audiate naturally in the reader's mind. Neither the identity, nor motive, of the narrator are expressed and in lieu of even that, what background information builds only mystery but with nothing to back it up, therefore it entices no reader investment in what's happening.
This site is for short fiction, not screenplay. There may be areas of overlap but the point stands.
This work is described as overly edgy because it relies on heavily overused tropes to have any sort of impact at all. Again, this is not screenplay, so you can't trust actors to put emotion and meaning into the scene, you have to convey that through the writing itself.
The fact that the characters (who by the way are little more than names that shout and then die, with no personality) react "appropriately" to the situation does not change the fact that the reader has to search their own mind to come to that conclusion. The dialogue doesn't read like dialogue, it has no flow, it only exists to establish more background. That alone makes the statement "this is not well written" go from an opinion to just a truth.
It seems like you don't know what a "D-class" is. While I don't blame you for that, I'll explain that we on this site get a lot of entries that in actuality belong on a different site with a different premise. Authors attempt to take the tropes and characters from the SCP Foundation and write them here, because posting here is an easier process. This in turn lands us readers with a bunch of low effort formulaic articles that we are under no obligations to be "gentle" about or "avoid using value statements with." That's the kind of deep background that goes into an article and comment like this, which are important to know before you leap to the defense of a work which is, in actuality and for multiple legitimate reasons, bad. It is you who lack understanding, and while I apologize if that sounds harsh, I'll not have a commenter reproached for offering legitimate and honest critique.
Feedback from NotAnOligarch
I'd like to throw in my two cents.
No, this isn't a good article.
Yes, the Critique was completely valid.Again, don't use the Library as a knockoff SCP wiki. This work isn't suited for this website.
There's nothing substantial here. An author doesn't just put words on a page. An author transliterates feeling, emotion, and mood onto the medium of paper. An author crafts a story like a chef crafts a meal. The characters aren't characters, they're cardboard-cutouts.The grammar and word choice is distracting at best, and horrid at worst. There isn't any emersion, at all.
Also, why are there suddenly a bunch of accounts rallying to support this piece? I'd not like to think that enough of the Library's population cares, or would like this article. I don't mean to sound paranoid or conspiratorial, but my sockpuppetry sensors are blaring.Anyway, even if I'm wrong, it's not a good article. -1
Another note, there are further comments from users that were banned for being sockpuppets. Additionally, there are staff further staff comments responding to this. The specifics of that case can be found here.
"Tears Within A Storm" by Arbiter_Darkness has been deleted at -4 for falling below the deletion threshold.
Feedback from RJB_R
I didn't really feel anything about this until the last line, and even then that wasn't enough. It's hard for one poem to stand alone to be enough to support a page, maybe try publishing a collection here so there's more the reader can find to enjoy?
Feedback from Maxyfran73
Not a fan of this one. It needs more substance to it, as the piece itself is rather barren. The italic stylizing of some words also feels off as, since it's used so much for such a short piece, makes any reasoning for its use moot.
-1
Feedback from UncertaintyCrossing
Agreeing with Maxyfran here, it needs a little more substance - either an expansion and polish to this piece, or perhaps adding it to a collection of other short poetry pieces so the page has more weight to it to stand on its own. The formatting I think can be done in moderation, but sticks out a bit too much on a piece like this. It's been a bit, but if you do plan on rewriting this, I'd recommend joining the Discord or utilizing the critique forums to get some feedback on the rewrite!
"The New World Spire" by BlueJones was deleted at -4 for falling below the deletion threshold.
Feedback from ZeroMan
Unfortunately, there are a lot of things in this article that made me want to downvote it.
1 - There is absolutely no characterization. If you swapped the 1st person view with a feelingless narrator nothing would change, and I feel like that really damages the article.
2 - There are a lot of things in the narrative that happen simply to further the narrative, and not because they make sense. The character simply exists where he is, and for some reason he has a suit of the CI. He reaches the spire and it's protected thaumaturgically, but he still manages to get in. He has water, finds food, and always goes where he needs to be at the right time.
3 - The creature attack was really random, and the character makes it seem like he knows what it is and that's why he fears it so much, but then suddenly he doesn't know and is only running.
4 - The fact he's immortal was referenced subtly in the beginning but then almost thrown at the readers' face when he's running from the creature
5 - The ending was rushed and I didn't really feel anything after it, it just ended
I feel like this needs a rework, but it could be improved if you built the world and the character better. So far, many things happen that the reader just has no reason to care about. I wish you the best in your future writing endeavors, and good luck with your next articles for the context!
Feedback from Snapdragon133
Was going to leave a good amount of crit for this one, but Zero covered pretty much all of it, so I'll keep it brief. I found this to be boring, because while things happened they happened for either no reason or with no explanation. Additionally, I find the use of the phrase "mind fuck" at the end to be out of character. It really doesn't fit the tone of the rest of the story either. I'm happy to see that you've thought about editing after the contest, and encourage you to do so
Feedback from Gabriel McQueen
A short story has to do a lot of worldbuilding and character establishing very quickly. I think you've got the story beats down, but you need more substance. By the end of this story, I still didn't know who this character was, why they had been in a cell, what the spire was and why they wanted to explore it, who else was in the spire, or what caused the change in the sky and land that's described in the first paragraph. All questions that could be answered, or at least have answers suggested or hinted through memories, thoughts, actions or reactions of the character during the time they spend exploring this space, rather than summing up that time as just travling x number of days, or x number of floors. I wanna know how this person feels about what they're experiencing. Are they shocked/horrified/saddened by the changed sky? Do they struggle at all on the three day journey to the spire? Do they know why they were in a cell, and how do they feel about having been in one? Are they offended/perplexed/unsettled/disgusted by the fact that their clothes have been changed, seemingly without their knowledge? Stuff like that, that's what makes a character real to me, and makes me want to know what's going to happen to them next.
But the time flies, irretrievable.
Deletions - 2022-01-19
"Scp 7000" by Slendyboi has been deleted at -5 for falling below the rating threshold.
Feedback from Snapdragon133:
There are a few things wrong here. First of all, we are a different site than the SCP Foundation. This is not a place for posting SCPs. If you want to post an SCP, you should go to the scp site instead (while still going through the review process). Secondly, this page is unfinished. You cannot post unfinished work on either website, that is why we have the Sandbox for drafting. Third, if this isn't an unfinished piece, you didn't go through any type of review, where you would've been told this doesn't hold up to the site's standards. I encourage you to continue writing, but I also urge you to read the rules/guides and follow the processes laid out for new writers such as yourself.
Deletions - 2022-01-21
"Scp 7000" by Slendyboi at -7 has been deleted for falling below the rating threshold and for reposting.
Feedback from Snapdragon133 (from first deletion post):
There are a few things wrong here. First of all, we are a different site than the SCP Foundation. This is not a place for posting SCPs. If you want to post an SCP, you should go to the scp site instead (while still going through the review process). Secondly, this page is unfinished. You cannot post unfinished work on either website, that is why we have the Sandbox for drafting. Third, if this isn't an unfinished piece, you didn't go through any type of review, where you would've been told this doesn't hold up to the site's standards. I encourage you to continue writing, but I also urge you to read the rules/guides and follow the processes laid out for new writers such as yourself.
