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I found the first and third stories to be much more enjoyable than the second, as it felt more like a transition where all that happened was a conversation.
In the first story, something that grated on me was how many times an anecdote involved mentioning a bodily function, then lampshading it by saying “not really.” You had it for eyes, muscles, hands, using glasses, and nose, which just felt like too much of the same joke.
I really liked the character design, the papier-mâché entity being a highlight for me. I also like a lot of the lore bits you interspersed throughout the stories. Additionally, I did enjoy the attempt to tie the stories into each other, but I felt like the 2nd needed to be stronger for that to work.
I was very close to novoting, but I think I enjoyed it enough to upvote, but please consider implementing some changes I suggested. Also, you should consider adding the Vitalis theme to this page! Here’s a link to the page with the theme
