A Conversation About Being / Discussion

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Maxyfran73 09 Mar 2022 01:07

Aw, c'mon, just when we were getting to the good part, dammit…

For real tho, I really like the execution here. While a simple premise, the ending is really good; really adds flavor to the rest of the writing. I like that.

+1

Alexander the Jar 09 Mar 2022 03:33

thanks!

Rounderhouse 15 Mar 2022 23:08

Interesting little bit of philosophical whiling. Doesn't outlast its welcome, sticks around just long enough to get the fundamental idea across then cuts off. At the same time… I do feel like the cutoff detracts from the piece more than it adds. Yes, the story sticks around long enough to toss the idea at me, but it's hardly a novel idea - which isn't a bad thing! Just that I think the story could've afforded to have more back-and-forth and analysis of the premise. It could've taken time to bake the cake, rather than handing me the raw ingredients. Given all that, gonna give this one a novote.

Alexander the Jar 16 Mar 2022 00:39

Totally understandable crit Rounder. Looking back on this, I can really tell that I rushed parts of the ending. Thanks for the crit though!