As the summary says, I finished writing a little piece last night that I hope to eventually put in The Journal of The Walk, but, before I do anything with it, I would really appreciate it if you guys looked it over and gave me some critique and advice, since I'm sure that there are bits that could be improved here. Personally, I feel that the ending could use a bit of work, but I don't know if that's just me or not.
The link is below, and the title is Universe Fruit.
http://wanderers-sandbox.wikidot.com/livia-s-notebook
Thank you!