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Evil, evil, you truly are! Stealer of the first comment.
What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?
I don't remember writing this :D
What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?
Hi Stygian I am commenting because I like this piece and I like you, thank you very much
In all honesty - keep using this kind of structure, it's very compelling, I am totally a structure nerd but this works well for your style
radiance, glorious and cold and blistering all at once, like a star behind the eyes
So alien in the world. Sometimes, when I was not daydreaming my life away on the wing, I stretched my muscles and dove down, careened between the spires, exercising stiff bones used to gliding with aerial acrobatics like I was that forest-flying army ranger I had dreamed of being when I was a kid.
This sentence is very messy, please make it understandable, hugs and kisses
a shart undertaken in a store,
This is either a mispelling of epic proportions or this doesn't really feel like it fits the tone of the rest of the piece, I would suggest considering replacement
louder now, and, and I lay on the raft, on my belly,
Double ands
Now, for opinions. This is the best Library discovery story I have ever read. Most people trip up and make it about the Library. It's not bad, and I will likely still like it, but it's not the best they could do with the concept. This fulfills that desire I've had from those types of stories. I love the simple worldbuilding you do, and the mysterious air that persists through the piece is perfect. Great job!
Feedback much appreciated as always. Fixed those things, I think — they should be much clearer now. Hugs and kisses warmly received.
Nitrogen for you, Snapdragon!
What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?
Lovely tale.
I wonder if the author is familiar with the Tumblr blog dictionaryofobscuresorrows.com/, the short YouTube series, and subsequent book - a lovely compendium "of made-up words for emotions that we all feel but don't have the words to express"
What a beautiful piece. The worldbuilding here is honestly marvelous. The character is really good and, althought a bit bloaty description-wise, it was a really fun read. All about this world before stepping through the door; that made the MC step through it… God, yeah, what an immensely fun read. Really like your writing.
Easy +1~
Forgot to comment on this the first time I read through it, but I'll comment on it now. This probably remains one of my favourites of the works you have posted, and the site at large. The imagery is extremely visceral, almost mythic despite its small scope and point of view - and the dreamlike structure certainly adds to your tone. Rereading it now in light of your newest posting (Something like a Storm), you've put together quite the world here and I'm very excited to see whatever hub you eventually post.
The world building here is spiiiicy. Like habeneroes hidden in a salad. Absolutely scrumptious character work sets the table. Delicate balance of flavors. Like wind under your wings on a Romantic night.
I'm Learning how to Styg comment. Are you proud of me yet?
-Ava
I watch the yonder hills
See foodwrenches toil in dust
Let their cacophonous calls
Rend our bodies to rust
I have been proud for a long, long time. And good job stygcommenting — I read it and was nonplussed, then realized that you are speaking my language. May the waves buoy you to the reefs where oxygen lives in water in such that you can breathe.
-Styg
What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?
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