Eh, dunno about this one. The writing is good, but the story is all about this person who doesn't remember much describing what's around them and what they have on hand and… It doesn't really gets anywhere with it? Sure, there is some speculation to make on the items, and they start moving towards somewhere, but it just feels very descriptive and not at all engaging of a piece. Feels like the introduction to a story, rather than the story itself. Think it needs more meat to it to really make what you have here work.
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