Watching from the City / Discussion

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Stygian Blue 04 Jul 2022 22:50

Thank you so much to Izhoudidion, destinysday, and Jackyfudge for the crit!

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

LAN 2D 04 Jul 2022 23:20

blue that was beautiful. this poem feels intensely personal: you present both the narrator and their friend with full emotional weight, and the narrator's internal conflict/journey feels especially nuanced. your imagery is raw, but also elaborate - the golden mean between lacklustre description and verbosity.

as always, the secret text is the cherry on top of the already rich cake. i think this may be my favourite of your works

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Stygian Blue 04 Jul 2022 23:30

This means so much to me. I wrote this as a tribute to a friend long gone; I am glad that the message was conveyed. Thank you dearly, LAN.

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

Jackyfudge 05 Jul 2022 18:36

Love it, the descriptions are so good at describing the thoughts that you feel uncomfortable reading them. I don't want to read this again but I want to read it so badly. It excels at what it's trying to do. Styg this is amazing.