Everything had to be nice and tidy and not have too much life but it can’t be too barren either or else the universe would be boring.
Run-on or possibly a fragment. Either way, I think this should be re-structured.
Please don’t try to sell me something I’ve had a long fucking day.
Missed a period after 'something'.
I think the dialogue could use some work, but I myself struggle immensely with that sort of thing, so I'm no help to you.
Super cool stuff you have here. I think if you take it more as a metaphorical work, it leaves a better taste. On my first read-through, I must say, I didn't like it. It seemed boring and unrealistic. A human chosen by this deific entity to make universes? A little silly. I got to the last line, however, and it prompted deeper thought into the story.
Overall, I liked it. Well done.
