A Fool's Pinings for a Lost Umbrella / Discussion

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lzhoudidion 12 Dec 2022 05:38

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“Just like two drops of water on a foggy windowpane, our lives joined together and got lost in the rain.”

The piece was heavily inspired by the harrowing experience of almost losing my umbrella in a university library and the surges of fear and adrenaline that ebbed after—sprinting down shelf after shelf, backpack beating behind while a full-force gale pounded away at the concrete planters, the elms and valley oaks beyond the tinted glass windows.

Thanks to Stygian Blue for the feedback! This one's been on the backburner for quite a while.

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Oh, how beautiful broken glass is, rendered smooth and satin in the water…

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Rounderhouse 12 Dec 2022 18:56

You have such a unique way of making these tiny moments in life feel like massive, philosophical conflicts and struggles. The prose in this is amazingly dreamlike — it feels like a trip and a fever dream in the best way, guiding you through freaky-ass but profoundly effective imagery. I like it a lot; it does a very good job of striking a chord in a way I didn't expect it to.

I Want to Lick It

Stygian Blue 12 Dec 2022 19:35

You made losing an umbrella into a spiritual experience. Gives warm library vibes but also panic and dreamlike scrambling for purchase on reality. If your prose were food it would be fettuccine drowning in sauteed mushrooms and white sauce and diced garlic and shredded carmalized onion curls. It would be heaped and steaming on a silver platter in an evening restaurant at a table for two, sitting across from you in a chair of mahogany with red velvet drapes cloaking us from the glare of the afternoon sun but still letting in the gentle heat. Cozy, warm, at the hearth. A light din of conversation that curls through the air like smoke. Beautiful work, Lzhoudidion.

-Styg

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What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?

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NotAnOligarch 12 Dec 2022 19:36

this story has no right to be as good as it is.

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Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.

Snapdragon133 30 Dec 2022 22:38

What the hell What the hell did I just read? Man you fuck me up Zhou, this is so cool

I- I... I don't know, man.

dracodiablo99 31 Dec 2022 04:44

I don't know what this was, but the language usage here was quite amazing. It took a while for me to blend it all together, but…
wow. Just- just wow. This was really cool. Well done.


With regards,
dracodiablo99

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My entire life has boiled down to this moment. This keyboard. What I write to you now is my blood, shed for your amusement.

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+1

Captain_Wavzies 27 Mar 2025 16:32

Justified literary crashout

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