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In part inspired by Warhammer 40k, written to abate my growing obsession. Thanks to Stygian Blue for crit!
radiance, glorious and cold and blistering all at once, like a star behind the eyes
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ROSIEHAMMER 40K!!
Made an eensy correction (And ye the pain is uncharacteristically dull -> And yet the pain is uncharacteristically dull) that slipped me by. Love the lopsided point of reference in this work. 10/10 tastes like well-spiced shredded chicken.
-Styg
What is life if not the contrast between what has been and what will become?
WOOOOOOO
as i said previously, the imagery in this is straight up amazing.
incredible
Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.
I really like this. The 40K influences are apparent (it’s easy to see this dude as an AdMech, for example, and you did literally state the inspiration) but while there isn’t a huge amount to set this setting apart the execution- especially the end line, which hits like a comically large hammer- is excellent. I really liked how you largely limit what you describe of the setting to the protagonist’s pains, it makes the story feel a lot more claustrophobic. Glad to see some more grimy sic-fi on the site, +1, praise the Omnissiah
I don't know jack about 40k to be honest, and I don't know more than I knew when I first read this in the Ideas/Crits forum. So from an outsider's perspective: I think this holds up fantastically by itself, it can survive without needing the crutch of knowledge-of-inspiration. Gets a burden-laden, and cancer-ridden +1 from me.
Goodbye, Zion.
Love the energy that's brought into this piece, this quasi-transmigration where bone becomes metal, that concludes in 'nothing special', despite the uniqueness placed into the build-up. Really recreates this sort of mass produce, impersonally cruel energy that is very similar to the vibes of 40k. In that regard, I can clearly see the inspiration, but also the uniqueness of the piece itself.
Overall, yeah, just a really solid piece. +1
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